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NightShade
15th July 2004, 14:02
This is a book I've been working on for some time so I'm going to post a couple of the chapters on here. Let me know what you all think even if its bad.
Thanks,
Nightshade




The Same Old Beginnings

A prologue to The Falling

By NightShade




Darkness, then the sounds began to poor into his ears. The sound of rain drumming onto plate mail, of wind howling through a treeless valley, and the screams and cries of war as thousands of armored warriors rushed like a wave into the valley.

Val’eron’s chain mail gloves dug into his hand as it tightened it around the hilt of his sword. He opened his eyes to a water soaked, mud filled valley, where several thousand of his brethren stood bracing themselves for the upcoming onslaught.

Val’eron took a deep breath and barely withstood the urge to empty his stomach. He had hoped the stench of death would be washed away because of the rain, but it still lingered heavily in the air around them.

He reached behind his back and stuck his arm through the straps of his shield and pulled it out before him. This would be the final battle. He could feel it in his bones. No one would be left standing, and he knew it would be him and his men that met this fate and not his enemy.

Several hundred archers stepped several paces ahead of the lines and went to one knee. They all drew arrows and knocked them waiting for the order to be called. Bowstrings were pulled back and the bow was raised. The air grew heavy and thick as the Fallen Ones began to reach the valley floor. They were no more than a hundred yards away from the first ranks of the army.

They moved quickly and passed half the distance within seconds of when they reached the valley floor. Val’eron blinked, and the twang of bowstrings sounded throughout the entire length of the rank. Screams and yells from the oncoming army echoed throughout the valley as they fell to the ground, fire and light consuming their bodies. The archers knocked another arrow and released a second salvo into the army once more.

Val’eron drew his sword, fire consuming the entire blade as the archers fell back behind the line of swordsmen. He pulled his sword back and set his shield in front of his chest. This was the hour when heroes were made, and today Val’eron would become one of the many heroes’ of this war.






The Fallen slammed into the front ranks of the army. The wall held, but just for a moment and then it was done. Several thousand dead in just seconds, but one survived as he rode off to tell his people what had happened. How they had stood, and how they had died. And so the cycle continued, but even the young man knew that it would not last and soon there would be no one else to fight, and no one else to protect that which they had worked so hard to build.

Eothin
17th July 2004, 19:45
Its pretty good, it need alittle more depth though.

Thats my two cents.

SirTom
17th July 2004, 21:55
who are the fallen ones? are they dead/undead or what?

its good nonetheless....makes you wanna read more

NightShade
18th July 2004, 13:37
Well, I'll get into who the Fallen are in the next chapter. It kind of explains everything in two chapters.

NightShade
21st July 2004, 17:43
Two Betrayals



Book One of

The Fallen Chronicles




Chapter One

First Light




Val’eron walked down the long stone corridor, the sound of his boots echoing throughout the room. Moonbeams shone brightly through the tall arrow slits in the wall casting an eerie shadow upon the room.

It had been several hours since he had woken up and it seemed that he would not be going to bed again anytime soon. The dreams would continue to haunt him whether he was awake or asleep.

Val’eron turned a corner and walked into a large room with vaulted ceilings that raised several hundred paces above his head. The stone floor tile turned into nicely manicured grass no taller than his ankle. And in the center of the great room stood a throne on top of a pedestal of water and stone.

As Val’eron stepped closer to the throne the pedestal lowered until it was level with the ground. He stepped onto the pedestal and sat in the throne and placed his hands on two golden discs hovering just above the arms of the throne. The pedestal began to rise, ascending to the opening in the top of the room. It slowed, and then stopped just over the top giving Val’eron a view of the surrounding land around the city.

Val’eron closed his eyes and breathed in a deep breath of fresh air. This had always been the best way for him to relax, and for the last couple days he had not had a chance to relax.

How many days had it been since Lucias had spoken rebellion to him? Since he hand tried to convince him to attack the very city of the Creator. He had thought his old friend had sought glory and power, but this was beyond reason. This was just madness, and it didn’t matter how many times he had spoken to Lucias he could not lead him off of this choice he had made.

To the north stood the mountain of Izepth, the mountain of God, and there at the top stood the gates into His domain. Into the great city of the Creator. Val’eron had been into the city many times, mostly to visit Lucias. This was also where he was appointed to lead his brethren by the Creator.

Val’eron sighed and sat up in the chair. He could think on these things later. Right now he just wanted to relax and enjoy the sunrise.

NightShade
24th July 2004, 12:17
I'm going to be on vacation for about 3 weeks, so I'll be back later. I bring some more story as well.