Song Lyrics [please don't laugh]

[Allein'd'Ashan]

i have written a couple of songs, over the past few years. just wondered i could get some feedback.
there is no melody, though. cuz i am not able to play any instrument:D

So here goes:

Lost

I sit here
Lost, inside myself
Remembering everything
You just said
But the doubt
It gnaws upon my soul
And leaves wounds
That will not close

Chorus:
I am lost within my head
While my heart it is at storm
In shadow, and in light
I do not know what to do


I am lost
To myself, and others
Talk to me now
For I am distressed
I’m waiting
For my answer
In my head, to come

Chorus:

Something’s piercing
Trough my head
But I do not know
What the hell it is
It’s disturbing my soul
And yet still
I can’t figure out
Why I am lost

Chorus:

Chorus:



Lyrics: Allein'd'ashan (it originally was my real name there)

[Allein'd'Ashan]

oh what the heck. here's another one while i'm online:D :

Huddle

My life is gone
For my eyes they hurt
The love I felt,
It dried away
And the hate I feel
It will not end

Chorus:
The life I lived
It changed so sudden
Changes did not halt
Until I huddled
Inside myself
And then I died
A little every day

The screams I filled
The air with
It hurts my head
So bad I scream
Though the silence
It echoes in the hall
And the light of your eyes,
It hurts me still

Chorus:

My head it ponders,
Though it hurts like hell,
It wonders why
And how it happened.
But my soul it cannot
Give me my answer
For my frustration
Is my biggest cell

Chorus:
Scream my Raven,
For I will disappear.
Now and forever
My soul it hurts.
So scream with me
Till our hearts
They brake


Lyrics: Allein'd'ashan

[Allein'd'Ashan]

I've begun on another text, but it is back where i sleep(i'm at my aunts).
:p

[Night_Daughter]

Those are good, do you have any ideas of music or the speed of the songs?

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Thnx!!!
nope, cuz i don't play any instruments:grumbles:
i really want to, but haven't got the motivation :p
I really like rock, and Muse(Think they're a genre themselves :p ), so theyll probably be a mix:p

[Allein'd'Ashan]

I'm not a race,
but something in between.
(the rest will be here tomorrow :p )

[Night_Daughter]

Or you could repeat those lyrics over and over and over and over
Its the song that never ends it just goes on and on :D

[Enariom]

Allein: Fortsett å skrive! Masse! Hele tiden! Du har mye bra å bygge videre på :)
Liker det jeg leser, og jeg tror det kan funke fint med musikk til!
Har du prøvd å skrive noe på norsk noengang?

Great lyrics :D Keep it up!

[Allein'd'Ashan]

nope, men jeg har større ordforråd på engelsk. litt ustabil norsk :p

A couple o' more lyrics coming right up!!!

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Freedom

My leash is short
And you think you hold me
But I know the better
So stop pretending
To hold my leash

Chorus:
I am Free
To be
Whatever I need
So scream
With me
Forever I am
Free

My steps are long
With you dragging after
Think you control me
But think twice
Or else I bite

Chorus:


I cannot think
Cause I breathe so hard
To run from you
But I will fight
To the bitter end

Chorus:

Chorus:

Lyrics:
Allein'd'ashan

[Allein'd'Ashan]

This song is from my more depressed period of life!!!

Faith for the Broken

Times are new,
So I can change
But the feeling remains the same
And the times
They require
More of me than they did before

Chorus:
Cause I’m not whole
And you’re not pure
And that is faith for the broken
The times they change
So do we
And it is time to change again

Feelings are different,
For I desire
Something else I have not felt
But the pains
They require
More of me than they did before

Chorus:

Those eyes,
They burn
More than ever before
If the pains
If they require
More of me, then I Will DIE

Chorus:

Chorus:




Lyrics:
ADA

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Lullaby

Feed me my hate
Then I will rage
Unleash my fury
Upon your soul
But you are the cause
Of my rage, it build’s
So do not cry

Chorus:
This, is not the end
My friend, cause
You will sing the
Lullaby
I will watch
Over you when
You are sleepin’
So dream, for some time

The sun is up
Now open your eyes
Cry out your tears
Cause my soul
Is broken
Like a
Glass figurine

Chorus:

And sometimes
I will see your
Eyes covered in fear
But, sing your lullaby
So full of dreams
And hope and joy
But life is more than that

Chorus:

Chorus:

Lyrics:
ADA

[Allein'd'Ashan]

talked to a friend the other day. and then his girlfriend called, and i walked over to a chair and sat down. as i waited, i started to sing a couple of tunes from Creed. my friend had walked behind me, and as i finished, he said: "fuck! you have a creed kind of voice!" thought it was a joke at first, but he convinced me. bit o' fun, really

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Detatched


I'm not of a Race
but something in between
Not fully at home
anywhere i go
So i am lonely
Among others of a Race

Chorus:
Even if i feel alive
i want to be dead
and as the matter goes
i will still be
the oddity of the world

As i fade into
the nothingness that i
really am, i notice
my damnation creeps over me
as the vermin humanity is
through the abyss and back again

Chorus:

And as the seals of faith
are shattered like glass
Then my flame is rekindled
as the hopes of others die
cause through damnation
one is made new

Lyrics: ADA

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Captivated

The universe is not going to stop
Just because i tell it to
I feel your warm embrace
and i wish it could last forever
My oath to this, to You
is everlasting
And the only thing i demand
is to be allowed to love you

Chorus:
The times they tell a tale
of lighter ages ahead
you are truly special
to everybody around you
so theese eyes, are captivated
Beyond freedom


This heart is set
never to betray your very soul
And for one moment
every breath is eternally
And my existence in this world
is ever so alluring

Chorus:


Whilst in your company
"I" am non-existant
and the very thought of parting ways
haunts me to the very end
Our story is not final,
so let's keep writing it
to time stops, and Mountains fall
i am yours

Lyrics: ADA

[rhemal]

Nice lyrics Allein. Most of the text show dept, I didnt know you liked to write like this. I really like some of the verses, tells me more about the complex person that is you. Now I am not in position to deliver critism(since I've never written a full song), but as your friend I know you would want to hear if i had some comments or suggestions. So here they are:
Lost: Nice! Consider changing the sentence "contact me now" to "tell me now" or something similar. contact is such a clinical expression :D Also maybe take the "hell" away from one sentence, to add some sincerety? (I dunno)
Huddle: also a nice one. For some reason "my eyes they hurt" didnt fit in with the rest i think. My life is over because they hurt? I liked the rest though, especially the screaming part, I could relate to that!
Freedom: I like the message, but not the composition of words. I think it lacks some of that elegant finish if you get my drift?
Faith for the Broken: Now this is some powerful lyrics! Really love this one! I like both the mood and the message. good job.
Lullaby: This also, great lyrics!! But I'm abit confused by the message, the person is the reason of the hate, but he dont want him/her to cry? and he will watch over him/her. Why? If he/her is the reason for the hate? It might be that he both loves and hates her I dont know. Anyway, excellent lyrics.
Detatched: I also like the message in this one. I would consider removing the last line in the first verse. And make "lonely" the last word of that verse. Also I would have changed the first part of the chorus to "I want to feel alive, but the pain makes me linger death"(or something similar).
Captivated: This is also a great song, maybe the best of your lyrics I think. I like the two first verses better than the rest, but still a great song! good job!
There. You have gotten my honest and true feelings of these lyrics, I hope you appreciate my honesty in the matter and do not feel that my suggestions are "corrections" cause its just my view, and I'm just trying to give another kind of feedback than people just saying "great job!". Keep writing my friend, I hope to read more of you soon.

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Nice lyrics Allein. Most of the text show dept, I didnt know you liked to write like this. I really like some of the verses, tells me more about the complex person that is you. Now I am not in position to deliver critism(since I've never written a full song), but as your friend I know you would want to hear if i had some comments or suggestions. So here they are:
Lost: Nice! Consider changing the sentence "contact me now" to "tell me now" or something similar. contact is such a clinical expression :D Also maybe take the "hell" away from one sentence, to add some sincerety? (I dunno)
Huddle: also a nice one. For some reason "my eyes they hurt" didnt fit in with the rest i think. My life is over because they hurt? I liked the rest though, especially the screaming part, I could relate to that!
Freedom: I like the message, but not the composition of words. I think it lacks some of that elegant finish if you get my drift?
Faith for the Broken: Now this is some powerful lyrics! Really love this one! I like both the mood and the message. good job.
Lullaby: This also, great lyrics!! But I'm abit confused by the message, the person is the reason of the hate, but he dont want him/her to cry? and he will watch over him/her. Why? If he/her is the reason for the hate? It might be that he both loves and hates her I dont know. Anyway, excellent lyrics.
Detatched: I also like the message in this one. I would consider removing the last line in the first verse. And make "lonely" the last word of that verse. Also I would have changed the first part of the chorus to "I want to feel alive, but the pain makes me linger death"(or something similar).
Captivated: This is also a great song, maybe the best of your lyrics I think. I like the two first verses better than the rest, but still a great song! good job!
There. You have gotten my honest and true feelings of these lyrics, I hope you appreciate my honesty in the matter and do not feel that my suggestions are "corrections" cause its just my view, and I'm just trying to give another kind of feedback than people just saying "great job!". Keep writing my friend, I hope to read more of you soon.

Thnx mate. i know they lack smething, but as i have said to ppl that have read them, before(my friends) they are not complete. the melody can change everything, and nothing, so they're unfinished. i'm working on a melody to "Captivated", but things are progressing slowly. love that you just didn't give the "Great job", and nothing more. i'm not at my full potensial, you know;):D:D:D:D

[Mazrim_Taim]

Wow, you right some deep stuff Allein. I wish I could come up with stuff like that; I also wish I could compose worth a shit. Alas, all I can do is sing stuff someone else gives me well. And even then sometimes I sound like a noisy parrot repeating the words of the dead. A word of encouragement for ya: some of the best music on earth has more than one person putting it together. You know, there's the poet for the lyrics (in this case you), there's the actual composer, songwriter, whatever you want to call the person, the performer(s) add their own richness to it (or they screw it up, it happens sometimes...). If you really feel like getting this stuff out to as many people as you can, ask one of your friends who composes (or find a friend who does) if he/she's willing to try to put music to the lyrics. There's bound to be someone out there whom these lyrics touch deeply, so try to find them. This will get the music created sooner than you learning to play an instrument, although I wish you determination should you wish to so that. And I don't even know where you intend to go with this talent of yours (well, I think you have talent with this), so what you do with this is up to you. I'll say this, though: it's better when someone at least tries everything they have talent for, rather than never use it all. And I'm probably saying things that you've already heard countless times before, let me know if I'm too cliche. Anyway, your lyrics are wonderful and I hope to hear someday that you've decided to put a sweet tune to some of them. And no one is ever at their full potential, there is always room for improvement. The important thing is to keep pressing forward. (another cliche statement. sorry about these). May our paths cross again, Allein d'Ashan. Sincerely, jon_herontachi

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Jon, we have a Edit-button for minor changes like that. it's not like my name hasn't been spelled incorrectly in tha past(i.e. Allien, Adshan, a.s.o.)

thnx for the tip, btw. i am searching for something who got the same taste in music as me, and is able to play an instrument/compose music. that would be great:p but, for the moment, i try to make'em myself:p

[fizban]

i can play keyboard/piano, and love muse, too

want me to see if i can whip sumthing up for 1 of your songs?

[Allein'd'Ashan]

that would be great!!! go ahead. take your pick in which song you want to work with, and send me an PM when you got something;):D

[Allein'd'Ashan]

wrote this to a close friend. dunno what it's to be named:p

Your trust is all I need
And your trust I have to heed
And remember everything I say
Cause they’re told from the heart
And remember:

Chorus:
In shadow or in light
I’ll be there
Among enemies,
Or secrets
I’ll be there for you

No matter what you choose
No matter what you do
I’ll stand by your side
Until the very end suffice
And remember:

Chorus:

I’ll never leave you behind
Never abandon this friendship
As long as this lasts
I’ll never walk away
So remember:

Chorus:

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Lyrics: ADA

[Allein'd'Ashan]

The pain is evolving
I'm screaming
But my voiceis never heard
My heartbeat is fading
Emotions drying away
as a river in the desert of life

Chorus:
This pain
is more than i can take
This design that life has planned
Is more than i can handle
I think of Death
I think of Joy
and my wish to liberate

My defiance
is filling me to my extent
and i defy all you say
But i'm burning up inside
incapable of feeling trust
to anyone but friends

Chorus:

A sword
that represents your words
are driving through my heart
And as i fade away
i cry a tear
to fill the emptiness inside

Chorus:

Chorus:


Lyrics: ADA

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Withered

I look into your eyes
And see this hidden pain
Are forced to look away
I hear these words you say

Chorus:
A withered soul I am
Twisted into a shape
That I do not recognize
Then I start to laugh
And sing this tale again


As these words are said
I kneel and take lay my head
Onto your waiting lap
And cry my waiting tears


Chorus:

Comforting words
Becomes whips of lies
I rise from my ashes
Like a phoenix of flames

Chorus:

Chorus:

Lyrics: ADA

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Claim

You’ve earned my trust
Have I earned yours
Whatever they say;
You got a beautiful face
I tell the truth
Don’t you laugh
You’ll see it anytime soon

Chorus:
The imperfection that you claim
Are what others made inside
Our twisted minds
You’re watched in a dubious way
For the things you say
Walking down your path


So I say once more
“Hello again my friend,
It’s been a long time
Since we last met
I hope you are well,
That everything is great,
And that you haven’t exploded yet

Chorus:

Chorus:



Lyrics:
Joakim Vold

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Alone again:

Theese words are for my ears alone
i'm screaming my defiance out
over the broken fields of despair
and as a shattered soul emerges
i can't seem to aknowledge


Chorus:
My patience is eroding
as my world crumbles up
i am tired once again
from the plotting of my kind
and my Sanity is wasting away


I couldn't walk away
cause the safety is comforting
though it is only a fake one
and i am wasting away

Chorus:


Something Else is bothering me
but i dunno what it is
as i fly away from this wretched place
i laugh as only madmen do

Lyrics:Allein'D'Ashan

[Allein'd'Ashan]

new song up:
Jester

I’m left alone
With a mindful of fears
I’m left alone
With an eyeful of tears
I sit in the corner of the room
Pretending that everything is swell
Then the darkness folds
And, sudden, all is well

Chorus:
I walk these hallways
As the Jester I am
I walk this damned life
With honour in my heart
I sleep alone one more night


Then I jest about this maddened life
Yet all these jokes is as
Perverted as my mind
I go through my redeemed strife
Though I’m not yet a carcass
I lie down on this spoiled soil
Breathing like I’ve run far away
With the gun’s glow in my head

Chorus:


I pray again
To whom, I do not know
I speak once more
What I say, I can vaguely memorise
I see again
But still the picture is blurred
And I give myself to the cause
That is unfamiliar.

Chorus:

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Lyrics: Allein'd'Ashan

[Enariom]

Ooooh, I like that one!

[Allein'd'Ashan]

thank you:D:D:D:D:D

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Starfallen

A hurricane of thoughts
With you in the centre
Every breathing second
My thoughts stray in your direction
To play
And caress

Chorus:
No more alone
In a world of strangers
I wonder
Which star did you fall from?

I feel you gentle skin
As your fragrance lingers
So sweet, so captivating
Your memories fly through my head
To play
And caress

Chorus:

A touch as light as a feather
I crave more
With my every breath
The sensation of you rewinds
To play
And caress

Chorus:


Lyrics: Allein'D'Ashan

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Still only a man

Still incomplete
and made of clay
Still utterly finished
in this neverending way
My Question is thus:
Why do I cry


Chorus:
I walk this chosen path
not knowing where I am
I walk this choesn path
that is filled with casms


Only just begun
to sprout my wings
Only being myself
in every single way
My question is thus:
How do I fly

Chorus:

A blossom among thorns
my heart will always be
A fallen star fom faith
My mind always is
My question is thus:
When do I smile


Chorus:

Man has fallen
into unproductive ways
I, on the other hand,
try to understand
My wuestion is thus
Where do I try

[Orange Juice]

I like that one! nice job! it reminds me of rand...

[Allein'd'Ashan]

just to remind my readers, every song i have written is somehow connected to my psyche, or how i feel. nothing to do with WoT

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Blazin’ Stars

I am revolving
Around a blazin’ star
I am rotating
In this silence
Just staring at the fire
That makes me blind
To anything else

Chorus:
Lines of gold
Lines her face
By the beautiful soul
That’s hidden behind
Those gorgeous eyes
That traps me again

She is smiling
To a king of fools
Who is calming his head
To try to think straight
While kissing her hand
And tasting her lips

Chorus:

They are laughing
And holding each other close
The blazin’ star and king of fools
Stared at nothing else
But the rain
While holding close

Chorus:

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Lyrics: Allein'd'ashan

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Blanket

With blood indebted
I scar my very own life
Alone without a blackness
Sincerity without a truth
I search this life for a meaning
To end the torturers hoot

Chorus:
The blanket covers me
Still I shiver
I shiver with despair
Yet I know my course
To stay the chosen path

While shattering the Silence
I speak my very thought
To unify a past
To conclude a present
And create a future so true
To unify the fields of yore

Chorus:

I turn my palms upwards
To show I speak the truth
The mongering press is yearning
For anything but for any indecency
But I will remain honest
To rectify myself

[Nynaeve Sedai]

I like starfallen the best, but they are all great works Allein:D keep posting them I'm eager to read more of your work.:wavey:

[Allein'd'Ashan]

thank you:D:D
*grins Madly*

[Allein'd'Ashan]

Punctuation

I’ve fallen a long way
Away from your grace
Fortunately I’ve evolved
So I can say
That I have an ace
Up my hidden sleeve


Chorus:
I try to concentrate
On those memories
But an image punctuates
And deflates that dream
Of a friend


You’re turning away
Pretending I’m not there
That I’m below you
I tried to make it better
But you just slinked away
Into your world


Chorus:


Located within your fortress
Seemingly invincible
But to me, that bubble’s
Fragile as glass tend to be
This battle is already won
Since you deny defeat

Chorus:

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[Thom Merrilin]

Those are pretty good man. Sorry for posting this when the topic is pretty dead.

[Allein'd'Ashan]

it isn't technically dead, isnce i'm the one writing songs... problem is that i'm so damn busy that i haven't time to write anything down...

[Allein'd'Ashan]

well... i think it's time to fire this ole' heap once again...and starting the new "era" is the latest poem by myself:p

Moonstricken


While other beasts bark at the moon,
I stare intentionally into abyssal desperation.
Unknowingly unleashing unwanted attention
toward trains of thoughts long abandoned.
Ever-growing effects of doubt in every second,
every enveloping aspect of time,
archaically anchoring my self
in instantaneous continual silence.