For Melissa from Jamie

[TRUTH]

Ok ppl, this may suck but it came straight thru my guts in a rush. Bleh. For clarification. The non-rhyming lines are Intentionally inserted in a random chaotic manner. Artistic license. Hehe. Somebody save me.


FOR MELISSA - From Jamie


You stormed my heart with no pretense
Melting my walls, wilting my defense
A certain night, a certain summer
I ran so far, you laughed so hard
We got into my car that night
You crushed my lips without a fight
Hand in hand, wearing a smile
Time for walking that last mile
Remember the sun cutting thru venetian blinds?
And that last frontier when you said, "You're mine"
You always sang me Disney songs
Your tears as you took my ring
Will you cry now, will you still sing?
Chained and fettered, still lost in love
Wishing below and praying to above
That black dress and red hair
I always bought your underwear
Cooking was never your strongest suit
Now it's "Let me go Jamie hon"
There's no more battles to be won
Only try a little to get better
Might as try to change the weather
Gave you a hedgehog on your birthday
Sitting, staring, thinking of you
All those little things you do
So dance for me sugar one more time
Help me put our past behind
No one promised us ever after

[satan]

knowing at least some of the background to that it made little tears well up in the corners of my eyes

*hugs*

[Alexia]

I don't really understand, of course. But I can guess a little. Like satan, it makes me want to hug you. Like all those happy times were a thing of the past? I especially like 'I always bought your underwear'. If not for the sad memories, but if only for the image. Sometimes, when someone writes a poem like you did, you can tell it has a certain feeling about it and this one seems to be a sense of... loss. But maybe one day, you'll be able to write something of the same effect and it won't be loss but it will be the happiness of old times? Maybe. *hugs*

[Silver]

Great. You always write great poems! It's the feeling that counts, not the rhyme or rhythem. You push that poetic liscense as far as you can! Anyway, I'm gonna agree with the others, this poem made me wanna cry. But I didn't, cuz I'm tougher than that..... *Turns around :cry: * Ok, I'm done.

[Dregs]

even without the background, i understand it, and it makes perfect sense to me.

~offers beer to TRUTH~

Nice one brother. If you were here, i'd get you smashed on beer and tequila.

[wendy]

I agree with everyone, it is a cool poem, although your avatar tends to lighten the mood of it a bit :) heh