My Lover

[TRUTH]

When I wake she is there
Chiding me softly
Taunting me with her touch
Wanton in her need for me
A morning temptress inviting me inside
I put her off but she waits so patiently
Thoughts of her torture me through the day
I know she waits to embrace me
To take my pain and ease the suffering
She's my Holly Golightly
A dark siren calling me
So terribly beautiful and beautifully terrible
I shudder
I need her
She's an old lover
Constant as the sun
Hair whiter than light
Eyes blacker than night
I want to lose myself in her
Do you know her?
Have you seen her?
She's looking over my shoulder
As I hold my cards close
All aces and eights like the hand before
I feel a caress and I shiver
She's an opiate for my rest
A ride without end
Leave my despair behind
Let her fold me in her pale arms
Twilight descends and my lover awaits
You know her as Lady Death

[Master Raven]

wow thats pretty good... wish i could write like that!
interesting subject matter, 2

[TRUTH]

Why thank you Master Raven. I was hesitant to post this particular work but felt that some people needed to read it. I'd be interested to know how it made you feel?

[Master Raven]

Yes I agree. It made me feel sort of like i was living through your shoes. It really got across the idea that you couldn't stop thinking about her. i also felt like there were conflicting emotions of some kind... It was very good... Better than mine, at least! well i wouldnt know that... cause no one comments on mine, so i like to comment on other people's so at least they get some comments even if i dont.

[Callandor9086]

Yeah, TRUTH, this was amazing, and it had a very nice finish to it! Surprised me, indeed. Very nice writing style, I liked it. Made me feel pretty good at the beginning, then wary towards the middle, and final pretty astonished at the end. Nice Job!

[Silver]

Beautiful. I love it how you called her Lady Death at the end instead of saying right out in the beginning who she was. I love twists like that. Yes, some do think Death is tempting. It is fun to write about.

[satan]

Very nice, and in the words of someone you know quite well... "Truth you are the best"


i actually read it again after the surprise ending just to see how you fit it in, and i must say you did it masterfully

i approve