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baxts
23rd January 2003, 01:54
hey yall, i've never put any of my poems up for public show before, so dunno what yall will think, but thought i'd put one of mine up. i only write during times of strong emotion, so they're kinda stressed out, but i'd be curious to see what you think,

"Weep"

I do not weep,
I do not cry,
My heart is stone,
I care not to try.

No one understands,
Few really care,
Just what I feel inside,
What is truly there.

The deepest pit, the darkest hole
Under a broken lee,
And what‘s verily there,
Not even I can see.

I know no-one can help,
No-ojne with human eyes,
Only god will ever see,
Because only he is truly wise.

I hide my feelings deep,
Behind a false façade,
And present to the world,
A face, that’s not as hard.

Because what would they think,
They couldn’t understand,
The inner turmoil I feel,
The struggle close at hand.

Am I that strong?
Will it ever come out??
This festering sore consuming my soul,
This damning, nagging, Self Doubt.

wendy
23rd January 2003, 06:43
this is cool baxts, surely can relate.

satan
23rd January 2003, 17:56
nice... i can relate aas well...

satan

baxts
23rd January 2003, 18:46
yeah, ill put another one up in a day or two, when i can be bothered typing it out :D

WFFS
23rd January 2003, 21:07
Very nice baxts :)

Just the sort of thing I always want to say, but better :D

Totally feel it.

baxts
24th January 2003, 22:41
hmm, this one is not as good i dont think, but ill put it up anyway,

What use a bright clear summers day,
Fair as a maidens eyes,
Raidiant with the promise of love,
If you are not there to share it??

What use a sonnet from my pen,
Flowing with verse and rhyme,
Swelling with budding hope,
If not inspired by your wit??

What use is faith and devotion,
To a hopeless cause.
These are questions, burning up my soul.

For love is a glorious thing,
And love, soars like a bird on the wing,
But love is as treacherous as the steepest mountain path,
And it is not a path I wish to tread.


I wanted to call this "the path of daggers, but that would be cheesy :D so myeah, has no title.

satan
25th January 2003, 12:34
LOL... path of daggers...

i like that one baxts.. it's diff than the other, but the 1st is not nesacerally superior

satan

mindphone
28th January 2003, 12:27
dream 01 you had a whole lot of fun with a comedian.

Alexia
1st February 2003, 20:54
Beautiful baxts. Beautiful loss really.